i sent her a poem what do u think

[Forever isnt so long]

so its been a month since the break up and shes already dating another guy so i decided i was goin to try one last thing i was goin to write her a poem about the good times. even though no one here knows the relationship that we had. id appreciate some feedback on what you all think...

 

It’s not easy taking a year of memories and putting them all in one poem

But if I had to do it...It might look something like this...

 

Remember that ankle, mistakenly kicked

"We Shared a Moment", two square dancing kids.

 

Remember our hands clenched tightly in the Go-Kart,

That’s when our love felt its first spark.

 

Remember our collision, That first real date,

a night of Dodgeball, and phones, and staying up late.

 

Remember long talks on the phone,

Telling you that you’ll never be alone.

 

Remember our first, aching kiss

That gave birth to butterflies and moon-drenched bliss

 

Remember I’d hold your hand and kiss it gently,

In return for the love you had sent me.

 

Remember when everything wasn’t all right,

So I brought you Bangle late at night.

 

Remember the car rides to stores,

And the way I would always open your doors.

 

Remember how on the couch we lay,

And I told you I Love You more each day.

 

Remember fun trips to the mall,

And just saying I Love You when I call

 

Remember each piggy back ride

Or just relaxing by watching Corpse Bride

 

Remember when I’d slowly run my fingers through your hair

And we created ourselves a world where we didn’t have a care.

 

Remember when you felt you were all alone and noone was around,

I told you I'd be there to pick you up when you fell down.

 

Remember the time your feet slipped in to ice skates,

Or one of our many other magical surprise dates.

 

Remember when I read you books before bed,

And later my chest was a pillow for your head

 

Remember coloring books, and crayons,

And later future plans.

 

Remember eating Lucky Charms

while you lied in my arms.

 

Remember when I’d try to sing lady marmalade

Or sitting with each other caressed by the shade.

 

Remember when we sat at camp with the singing loons,

While watching as the stars made love to the moon.

 

Remember Minigolf and Bumper Boats,

All the cards and random notes.

 

Remember when I surprised you at camp with roses,

Or when we’d just sit on the couch and kiss with our noses

 

Remember rides on the boat around the lake,

Happiness no soul could ever fake

 

Remember Birthdays at the Great Escape and the Lighthouse

And when I would bring you to practice at the Boathouse

 

Remember going to see Blue Man Group

Or conversations while we pooped (ha-ha)

 

Remember cards and stuffed animals when you were sick

All the dark chocolate and ice cream your tongue could lick

 

Remember Je t'aime and merci bocups

and our special spongebob sippy cups

 

Remember Subway and Snapple’s

Or going to Riverview to pick apples

 

Remember Hugs and Kisses from behind

And how I was always there when you cried

 

Remember giving me facials and popping a pimple

Who knew that making you happy was that simple.

 

Remember building men from snow

Or the sock monkey I tried to sew.

 

Remember cookies and chocolate so hot,

Or shoveling on valentines day when it snowed alot.

 

Remember going to camp and we rode the snowmobiles

Or the first time I let you drive my new wheels

 

Remember how I would kiss your lips, nose and forehead

Each and every night before bed

 

Remember when I told you I’d Never Leave

While you rested on my shoulder as we watched TV

 

Remember ice cream at the park,

Underdogs on the swings, and giving you My Heart.

 

Remember the nights I would tuck you in

or games of Guitar Hero I would Let You Win.

 

Remember trips to the Libraries

And all the chocolate covered strawberries

 

Remember all the hard homework

You helped me even though it made you berzerk

 

Remember how I always asked you first for help,

Because I knew deep down I couldn't do it myself.

 

Remember breakfast and dinner by surprise,

Or how next time I went to Taco Bell you wanted fries

 

Remember going to Target and picking out dishes

Slowly fufilling all of our future dreams and wishes

 

Remember I said you sound like a chipmunk singing "Go Home, Get Stoned"

And with laughing Brown Eyes you’d reply "No I Don’t"

 

Remember cute nicknames, you were Piglet and I was Pooh

While telling you how much I Love You.

 

Remember when we said we’d love each other no matter what

Even if I put on 80 pounds and got a huge gut

 

Remember we said we’d be there for better or worse,

I always said you sounded funny when you cursed

 

Remember buying you books of Sudoku,

Just to give you yet more things to do.

 

Remember after a hard day I’d massage your feet,

Just so for that moment you wouldn’t have to feel so beat

 

Remember sitting on the floor having picnics,

Or playing "Cookies and Cream" just for kicks

 

Remember our trip in april to the planetarium,

And how I lost that game because I couldn't clear my cranium.

 

Remember when we’d watch Veggietales on DVD,

Or trips to the mall just to see a movie.

 

Remember that gorgeous ring and lovly blue gown

Making my "Promises" that day when you were down.

 

Remember when I ran 2.3 miles

Just so I could see your smile

 

Remember slowly dancing upon my feet

even in memory the thought remains sweet

 

Remember when I went to your Crew race

Just so I could cheer you on and see your happy face.

 

Remember chicken parm and strawberry shortcake,

on our one year watching American Idol’s Blake.

 

Remember when I said I’d love you Forever and Ever

Your Happiness was my only endeavor.

 

Remember when I said to you I Love You

I Remember when you said I Love You Too

 

Remember that time I wrote you a poem reminding you of the good times

And how much I still care even though what I lack is good rhymes

 

But Most of all...

Remember the laughs

Remember the smiles

Remember the times we had for a while

Remember the good

Remember the bad

Remember the love that we once had

Remember with a smile

Remember with a tear

Remember the times I held you in fear

Remember the kisses

Remember the hugs

Whatever you do don't forget US

 

Please Respond whenever you feel comfortable......

Love Always,

Nick

P.S. I Love You Forever and Ever, To Infinity and Beyond

 

so tell me what u think

[Pixie-Minx]

Hey hunny that poem is lovley, but i think it needs to be half the length, i got bored reading it and i never get bored!

beware tho i tried writing my ex a letter and he just ripped it up,

by the sounds of it she was so lucky to have you, i wish my ex was like that! x

[vivrantflo]

I have read your posts, and I'm somewhat familiar with your story.. but even someone who isnt familiar with your story, would probably advise the same thing I am about to right now.. Don't send her that poem.. please.. just don't do it.

 

What your poem should be, is a personal recap of what your relationship is like. I suppose it was helpful to write all that stuff down, but sending it to her won't do ANYTHING.. well.. actually it will.. it will either stroke her ego, or completely freak her out.

 

She has another man!! Why take time to make her a poem?? Dude, I understand you're hurting, and I know what it's like to have an ex replace you faster than a lightbulb.. but sweating her like this, isn't helping you.. and it's tarnishing your image. She belongs to another man right now.. so let her go. She doesn't deserve your thoughts, or poems, or anything! Take time for yourself to get back on your feet.. then you'll realize that there's more of a selection of women out there for you. Good luck

[Outofluck]

I've got to agree with Pixie..way too long. I did read the whole thing and I think that you are trying to jog her memory into a sentimental relapse of your relationship, bringing her back to you. Sorry to say that it simply won't work. If you send it, she may certainly read it and feel sad for a moment..a moment only...and then call him. Think about it, if you had found someone new and your ex sent you something like that what would you do? Probably run away.

 

Poetry is certainly a great outlet for the expression of our inner-most emotions and can have a healing effect on the sould but I simply would not send her that. You may ruin your chances for good.

 

Who knows, she may realize that the new guy is a tool and then come back anyway...stranger things have happened.

[passionpeach]

The poem was so lovely! I wish someone can send me something like that too. But I have to agree with the others though. If you send it to her, you are standing the risk of getting hurt again. You would not want that to happen. It is just like scratching a healing wound all over again. You have to start moving on. Do not hold on to the memories. Remember this.. Memories are good but that's all they are.

[funkybassplayer]

send her this,

 

thanks for the good times, see you later.

 

Short n sweet.!

[bish]

What do I think of the poem?