help me write a sensual letter give me your opinion on what i have

[Vivid_29]

Yeah, you could say that, but you never know

 

~V

[Helpme2004]

ok yeah sure im a snob vivid if i was i wouldnt be on here yes i know what a dick lay is thank you but since you guys seem to know more than me the way im taking it then tell me what is your version of dick lay since you brought it up.didnt realize writing a simple letter would turn into a debate geesh

[jenny]

i agree; get to the nitty-gritty sooner. also, please watch the cliches - i don't know about your target audience, but they are quite disruptive for me. what is it about this individual that you like? is it his length, girth, longevity, or the way he wildly cooks? if you focus on his specific erotic qualities it's going to be a better piece. dyer's dead on about the senses as well. check out some books on erotic writing from your local library as well - they have some sound advice on the logistics and perspective questions.

 

kudos for you for writing this letter though! an army buddy asked me to do one for him, but my sense of irony was too strong for it to be successful in it's er..mission.

[moimeme]

im a snob

 

No, not a snob - a 'noob' as in NEWBIE.

[Helpme2004]

ok thank you jenn ive redid this like 10 times so far......rewriting it this is what i have so far......

 

 

Come with me. We'll walk on the beach and get to know one another. We start talking as we walk by the water until the sun sets, red as summer roses. The breeze will blow, soft and warm as my breath on your cheek. Come with me.

After our walk, it will feel good to sit down and the blanket will feel warm. Side by side we shall sit and talk, our words blown about by the breezes. The words will not matter, what will matter is our closeness to each other, our eyes drinking each other in, watching each others lips forming the words that neither one of us will hear, heads getting closer and closer, eyes closing finally, our lips meeting. our kisses grow warmer, more urgent, under the glow of the moon.

 

We enjoy kissing one another under the moon.Our kisses get warmer under the glow of the moon .I suggest we go back to your room.. Our fingers meet accidentally as you pass the glass of bubbling champagne. I giggle when the fizz tickles my nose . We both slowly undress each other,our clothes seem to fall away. taking in each others curves,fingers trace curves ,

, you slide your hand up my soft arms to the straps of my gown.and they fall away, leaving my breasts exposed.goosebumps appear over my body, begging for your warmth you pull me close to you my arms around your neck i kiss your neck softly, tracing the soft skin down with the tip of my tongue i caress your chest wanting more of you demanding more of you i want to taste every inch of you

 

Feeling your warm breath against my skin your lips caressing mine our hearts pounding wanting more you caress my breast ever so gently you start

to slide your tongue down my chest towards my breasts tasting ,touching them you begin to slide your tongue towards my stomach kissing it ever so gentle

[Vivid_29]

Originally posted by Helpme2004

ok yeah sure im a snob vivid if i was i wouldnt be on here yes i know what a dick lay is thank you but since you guys seem to know more than me the way im taking it then tell me what is your version of dick lay since you brought it up.didnt realize writing a simple letter would turn into a debate geesh

 

Relax girl -- I didn't say that you were a snob. I said that you were a NOOB!!! And I wasn't sure if you knew what a dick-lay was and if you didn't, I was going to tell you what it is. Believe it or not, I was actually looking out for you!

 

This is the gratitude I get for taking a noob under my wing!

~V

[Helpme2004]

oh im sorry i read the post wrong i thought u were saying i was a snob ok noobie just seems like i was being slammed

[Vivid_29]

Ok, understood -

 

Do you really know what dick-lay means?

 

~V

[Helpme2004]

well my version might be different than yours lol im a woman

[Vivid_29]

It means 'taggin that a$$'.

 

'Dick-lay' is Dave1234 jargon. If you read some of his threads, you'll understand. Occasionally, you'll see 'dicklay' and other Dave jargon, floating around the forums.

 

~V

[Helpme2004]

i thought so my version was similair but more like jumping on him and riding him like the stallion that he is lol

[Vivid_29]

Damn girl - I like the womans version of 'dick-lay' better!!!

 

~V

[Helpme2004]

lol oh please im blushing now ..

[Vivid_29]

Originally posted by Helpme2004

lol oh please im blushing now ..

 

Oh, how lovely...

 

Alright darling, you will have assistance with your 'f**k' letter. I know a little girlie girl who can help you out. Stay in touch!

 

~V

[Helpme2004]

will do vivid lol my what letter please just come out and say it my **** Letter lol

[Vivid_29]

If I say it, the mods will send me to my room without my dinner, so I have to behave myself!

 

~V

[shakespearefan]

Originally posted by Helpme2004

i thought so my version was similair but more like jumping on him and riding him like the stallion that he is lol

 

There you go! Put that in your letter. I'd be thrilled to get a letter like that.

[Helpme2004]

i think most men not all would love to recieve a letter with that in it lol

[Errol]

Well, I made a stab at it as though it were a letter. I omitted some things -- sorry. If it were a narrative I could add those things in , but it would be much longer.

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Letter:

 

Dearest xxxxx:

 

I want you to come with me to the beach, where we can enjoy the breeze and the pulse of the surf against our bare skin as we walk along the shore and the water will send up sprays of white foam against our ankles. I want to know your desires and listen to your fantasies until the sun slips below the horizon in a crimson glow red as summer roses.

 

We can find a secluded spot and spread a blanket – soft against our skin and warming us from the cool sand beneath. We can whisper our words of longing – hearing only the sound as the words are swept out to sea with the breeze. I want us to drown in each other’s eyes and share gentle kisses that delight and demand.

 

As the moon rises over the water and the moonbeams caress our skin, highlighting the evidence of our passion, we can pause for a few minutes only – just long enough to rise and walk back to the dark and the quiet of our room.

 

As we walk along my fingers will tease and tickle you until we are both in a frenzy as we close the door behind us. In my mind I can see us there already and I can see my arms slide down your sides and under the waistband of your trunks. I can feel your need for me in the trembling of your own hands as they trace the curve of my back and reach to unfasten my top and slide it off.

 

I can already taste the salt on your chest and feel your hands on my body as we move to the bedroom. Can you feel me too? Will you come to the beach with me?

[Arabess]

Damn Errol....I know YOU'VE given up smoking.... but after reading that.... I need a cigarette!

 

I thought men like receiving sexy slutty letters. I used to be in a relationship where one of us would start one and then pass it back and forth....adding to it....till we were finished with THAT one. We would use different charcter names, dialects, places, moods.......it was great fun.

 

Now, there is a difference between a 'this is how I feel love letter' and a 'this is what turns me on sex letter'....but I think there is a time and place for both.

[Errol]

Some men enjoy romance just as much as women do!

 

Others would be happy with a short and to the point love letter like:

 

Dear xxxx:

 

I'm wet, wanna?

 

 

 

[Helpme2004]

damn errol that was good now i wanna jsut f**k LOL

[Helpme2004]

Come with me. We will walk on the beach and get to know one another. We will talk

and walk by the water until the sun sets red as a summer rose. The breeze will blow

as soft as my breath on your cheek. Come with me.

After our walk, it will feel good to sit down and the blanket will seem warm. Side by

side we shall sit and talk, our words blown about by stray warm breezes. The words

will not matter, what will matter is our closeness to each other, our eyes drinking in

each other, watching each others lips forming the words that neither one of us will hear,

heads bending closer and closer, eyes closing, lips meeting. Our kisses will become

warmer, more urgent, under the glow of the moon.

We'll enjoy kissing one another in the moonlight. One of us will suggest going back to the

hotel room although neither one of us will be able to remember who exactly had this idea

first. Once inside and comfortable, our fingers will meet accidentally as you pass the

glass of champagne to me. I will giggle when the fizz tickles my nose. Wanting even

more, we both slowly undress, our clothes seeming to fall away. I'll pull away slightly

to admire your lines, your muscles. You'll run your fingertips down my body, tracing the

curves. You'll slide your hands up my soft arms to the straps of my gown, pulling them

down. The material will fall down, leaving my breasts exposed. Goosebumps will appear

over my body. I moan, begging for your warmth. You pull me close to you. I wrap my

arms around your neck. I kiss your neck softly, tasting the soft skin. I make you inhale

sharply when I run my tongue down your neck to your chest. I want more of you. I

demand more of you. I want to taste every inch of you.