Being Thickheaded Gives Rise to Bad Poetry

[NewLee40]

I just thought I'd post this poem I wrote nearly a year ago about my relationship with my ex. You would have thought I wouldn't have put up with this as long as I did, but I'm thickheaded I guess. Maybe some can identify, but please...no poet critics. I know its bad on multiple levels.... LOL

 

Lost in Translation

 

Oh no, here we go again

Say the words to pull me in

 

A look, a word, a touch, a sigh

The smallest spark blows me high

Setting off a chain reaction

I believe your words, and ignore your actions

 

I'm lost in translation

Building my hopes and expectations

On the shifting sand of your affections

I'm blinded by love and searching for direction

 

And now, you don't even try to pretend

Throw me a crumb, just to watch me bend

Light my fire, and watch me burn

Take what you need, but its never my turn

 

You name me as your friend,

yet you kiss me like a lover

You say you need your freedom,

but claim there is no other

You blame it on the hurt,

and chalk it up to fear

You call to say you miss me,

and then you disappear

 

I'm lost in translation

Such simple terms should need no explanation

Is it your intention to deceive?

Or do I just see what I want to believe?

[Mary3]

Excellent Poem

 

I think it goes to show when one is the giver and one is the taker~~....one hopes ....and one does not care.

 

I think its nice to write a poem when you don't feel anything anymore about the person ..

[seachange]

...they sound like lyrics to me.

 

I like them. :-)

[NewLee40]

Sea, thanks, you made my day. I originally wrote them as song lyrics, but I called them a poem because I figured they didn't look like much of a song.

 

LOL

[Drivetildriven]

Wow, that's awesome. I'm gonna go out on a limb here and say that most people on this site can relate to it. I know for me, it describes my story exactly.